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[AngryCas]

So here it is; I've come up with my first resume to try to "wow" the place I am applying for. I've already "wowed" the GM, but the DM is next and I have not met him. I am applying for AM since that is what the GM suggested to me, but the problem is I have had minimal management experience. So if you have the time, please look over what I've come up with and be as critical as possible. :)

(Heads up: it's for a position at a Bohemian-type store. They sell hermit crabs, little Buddhas, tapestries, body jewelry, and the sort.)

AngryCas
(address, phone number, email)
________________________________________

OBJECTIVE: To obtain a full-time career, providing outstanding Customer Service in Western PA.

EDUCATION

Community College, (location)
English, Education
2007 – Current

University, (location)
Creative Writing
2006-2007

Diploma
(my high school)
(date), Honors

AWARDS
2006 – Who’s Who Among American High School Students
2006 – National Honor Society, Vice President
2005 – 2006 – Editor in Chief, La Saltianna (I was awarded this position, does this count)
2004 – 2006 – Editor in Chief, The Saltshaker (same as above)

EMPLOYMENT

Certified Custom Framer, Michael’s Arts and Crafts Store
September 2007 – Current
• Provide Customer Service in fast-paced atmosphere
• Extensive work with Visual Standards and Merchandising
• Ordering, Assembling, and Creation of Custom Framing Orders within Deadlines
• Conducting Ordering and Receiving of Products
• Operating the Register
* Filing and Storing of Professional Documents
* Gaining Expert Knowledge on Specific Framing Tasks, as Well as Full Certification


Sales Associate, Carmike Cinema 15
April, 2007 – September 2007

• Provide Customer Service in fast-paced atmosphere
• Conduct receiving of products
• Cross-trained in Four Separate Departments
* Prepared New Employees through Training
* Handled Cash, Credit, and Debit Transactions, Balanced Drawer
* Gaining Expert Knowledge on Importance of Inventory

Cashier, Petco
2006 - 2007

• Provide Customer Service in fast-paced atmosphere
• Maintain and Restock Inventory
• Extensive work with Visual standards and Merchandising
* Gaining Expert Knowledge on Animals

Key Holder, Mr. Ice Cream
2004 - 2006

• Perform Excellent Customer Service in a Fast-Paced Atmosphere
* Prepared New Employees through Training
• Place Orders to Restock Merchandise and Conduct Receiving of Products
• Manage Reports, Inventory, and Maintain Sales book and Records
• Administrative responsibilities include processing hourly sales information and
Opening and Closing of the register
* Contributed to the Hiring Process
* Gaining Expert Knowledge on Customer Satisfaction


COMPUTER SKILLS

• Proficient with Microsoft Word, Excel, and PowerPoint, Macintosh Applications, Internet
* On Average 103 WPM

RELATED ABILITIES

• Extensive Knowledge of Proper Pet Care
• Extensive Knowledge of Body Modifications
• Extensive Knowledge of Asian Religions
• Extensive Knowledge of Color and Design Theory

REFERENCES
Available upon request.



So, if I came into your Boho store, and placed this in front of you, would you like me? Thanks for the help.

[Imprl59]

First of all you have plenty of experience for an AM job. Don't sell yourself short.

A couple of thoughts...
Education should go down below your work experience.
Make sure your resume fits on one page.
Some of your best experience is with Mr. Ice Cream, but I don't know what "key holder" realy means. Could you change that to something a little more universal?

One of the big things I look for when hiring someone, especilly a mangement person, is someone that is going to stay. Make sure you are prepared to explain any jobs you weren't at very long like Carmike cinema.

Enthusiasm is your huge selling point. I don't know you yet I already like you and that's what will get you the job. You have done a very good job with the resume. Good luck!!!!!